- In some part of my second body paragraph, one of my peer reviewers suggested that I incorporate/connect Gee and Brandt’s ideas to my own thoughts on the subject before closing the paragraph. Also, around the bottom of the second page I was told to clarify and put the ideas/quotes I used from Alexandra into the beginning of the sentence. Along with the above suggestions, I could also tie some thoughts together from Alexandra, with Gee’s “Mushfake” idea to tie the two together. All in all, my peers didn’t make many suggestions about adding/affirming/challenging, however they encouraged me to incorporate my own ideas on the topic.
- My peers have written that I have used good quotes and examples form the scholarly texts although I could explain on the quotes a little more, and did a good job summarizing the narratives I used.
- My peers said nothing about finding other sources, however my SASC instructor suggested reading through the scholarly texts again and look for more ways I can incorporate them into my paper. She suggested I should do the same with the three narratives I chose as well.
collreadwrit2e