Month: April 2017

After looking back at my first draft, I noticed that there was a few things that needed improvement. The main thing was organization. Almost every student and teacher that read my paper suggest I organize my paper. The problem with an unorganized paper is that the reader has trouble following the purpose of the essay. Another issue with my first drat was the relation to Gee. I didn’t relate my paper enough to Gee. I would describe my artifacts, but I wouldn’t show the relationship with Gee. Relating my discourse to Gee is the main purpose of the essay. I also think I could have done a better job describing my artifacts and how they were important to hockey. I need to make my paper very clear for the reader. One last thing that I thought I could improve on was grammar. I had to many grammar issues that made it difficult for the reader to understand. Grammar is something that I shouldn’t be messing up on. After re reading it a couple of times, I was able to fix these mistakes.

 

After finishing my final copy, there was big improvements as far as organization. I made my paper very clear for the reader. I start out by stating the purpose of the essay, that hockey players are the toughest athletes. I then get into describing how Gees artifacts relate to my discourse. Throughout the essay I use different articles with quotes that show that you toughness when playing hockey. All of these quotes were relatable and matched my topic of discussion.  In my first draft, the quotes didn’t relate to my topic. Thats what made my paper unorganized. With my final copy, I made sure to make the topic is to understand and follow throughout the entire essay. Every quote was relatable to being tough in hockey. I also made sure to relate each artifact to Gee.

 

When meeting with Mr. Cripps and having my fellow classmates review my essay, they told me that I needed to improve on describing my artifacts and the importance of them. My rough consisted of me just listing my artifacts and not describing them or relating them to Gee. After receiving feedback from Mr.Cripps and my classmates I was able to fix this problem and make my essay more clear for the reader. Describing quotes is very important when writing an essay because it shows the reasoning behind putting the quote in the essay.

 

An important part of developing as a writer is the ability to critique others work. In doing so, you have to be able to spot mistakes and be able to tell them whats right and whats wrong. When critiquing my partners work on this essay, I was able to get good ideas from there readings.  Before critiquing there papers, I was unsure of my essay. My paper was unorganized and didn’t follow the prompt. After reading a few papers, I was able to get a better understanding of the prompt. Critiquing others work allows you see things that you may not have seen before. It helps you get good ideas. Everyone thinks differently so its good to see what others are thinking.

 

In my essay I make it clear in the intro that my essay is about the toughness in hockey relating to Gee. Throughout my essay I use quotes from different articles that all can relate to Gee. I made sure that every quote is similar and relates to toughness. In my first draft, the quotes were all over the place. They were all about hockey but didn’t have the same discussion. The setup of my paper is an intro and then body paragraphs discussing why you have to be tough to play hockey. I than follow that up with a conclusion that sums of the entire essay.

 

As I stated earlier, my first draft was unorganized. I had good artifacts but I didn’t do a good enough job relating it too Gee. After reviewing my first draft, I knew that the most important thing would be making sure my paper was clear for the reader. I started off by making a sketch of what would be discussed in each paragraph and which quotes I would use to relate to Gee. After doing this, it made it very easy for me to write my paper.

 

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While being apart of the dominant secondary discourse of dentistry there are ways of transferring.It is possible for someone to transfer the ideas, or values learned to a different part of the discourse. In dentistry there are subunits within the discourse. This sub units use the same language to make connections between specific practices within dentistry. Understanding the language in a discourse is important because it shows ways of fluency, which is important for identity. This  identity is commonly shown by a DMD, that is required for everyone that is in the dentistry discourse. Although not everyone has to participate in the same practices in order to be fluent in a discourse. As talked about there are many sub units in dentistry that require different techniques. These techniques are offered by specialties that all require that identity of a DMD, but can have a certification in ; orthodontics ;maxillofacial surgery; pediatrics ;etc. The connections between these subunits and the overall discourse are shown through a common language. Having a accredited DMD, shows that you are a part of a dominant secondary discourse, but having a speciality certifications allows you to practice in different aspects of the discourse. However, being a dentist, orthodontist, or any other personal that holds a DMD will have an honorable name in their community, which can be a way of prestige. This prestige shows that they are specifically a part of  dominant secondary discourse according to the scholar Gee.time on task: 25 mins

Does my analysis of this particular Discourse have components that do not quite fit into a straightforward application of Gee’s ideas? What are they? (If so, perhaps you have something important to ADD to – or even CHALLENGE Gee’s sense of – the ways that Discourses work.)

The idea of connections, doesn’t automatically come to my mind when I think about the discourse of dentistry. Although the idea of transferring did, which made me think of the building task connections. I really think that the building task connections will add to Gees ideas of transferring within the discourse. I think this is important because if it wasn’t for the connections between the different levels within one discourse, not every patient would be taken care of properly. I think this being one of my main claims, would benefit my paper.

Are there reasons to consider the ways your Discourse works very similarly to other, perhaps related Discourses? Maybe your Discourse is a subset of a broader set of Discourses. (If so, perhaps your analysis may be able to tell us about this broader set of Discourses.)

It depends if I do being a dentist as a separate discourse as an orthodontist or any other dental specialty then get they do work very similar because they work together through the connections they have in the separate discourse. I do think that my discourse can be the broad term of dentistry then talk about how their are sub parts of this discourse that are still within the same discourse by the building task of connections and knowledge. Although the ways of practicing and doing aren’t totally the same because one might be better in one part of the discourse than one other. Also not everyone within the same discourse have to have the same ideas are another in the discourse.

Our Discourse analyses are all limited by the source material from which we’ve drawn. Hopefully, you’ve chosen really good artifacts that help you reveal some key features of the Discourse. But there are probably some important LIMITATIONS that you can see. What are they? These are possibly areas for further inquiry should one pursue the project further.

I think I need to find some better artifacts to explain the connections between the sub parts of the discourse. I think some of my artifacts need to be changed to better my explanation between the connections with the other building task. Also how they differ, but are still a part of the same general discourse of dentistry. Time on Task 30 mins

Point 1: In the first body paragraph my main claim is showing the discourse I will be discussing is a dominant secondary discourse.

Point 2: I currently talk about identifies and relationships, but I want to change that to changing it to the ideas of connections throughout a discourse. Also mention Gees Ideas of transferring.

Point 3: I would then change just discourse the filtering to instead talking about the similar ways of identities within the subunit and the overall discourse.

Point 4: I would then like to discuss how that even though they practice different they overall use the connections to bring the best care to each patient, by referring them to to someone with better knowledge in that specific part of a discourse.

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While being apart of the dominant secondary discourse of dentistry there are ways of transferring.It is possible for someone to transfer the ideas, or values learned to a different part of the discourse. In dentistry there are subunits within the discourse. This sub units use the same language to make connections between specific practices within dentistry. Understanding the language in a discourse is important because it shows ways of fluency, which is important for identity. This  identity is commonly shown by a DMD, that is required for everyone that is in the dentistry discourse. Although not everyone has to participate in the same practices in order to be fluent in a discourse. As talked about there are many sub units in dentistry that require different techniques. These techniques are offered by specialties that all require that identity of a DMD, but can have a certification in ; orthodontics ;maxillofacial surgery; pediatrics ;etc. The connections between these subunits and the overall discourse are shown through a common language. Having a accredited DMD, shows that you are a part of a dominant secondary discourse, but having a speciality certifications allows you to practice in different aspects of the discourse. However, being a dentist, orthodontist, or any other personal that holds a DMD will have an honorable name in their community, which can be a way of prestige. This prestige shows that they are specifically a part of  dominant secondary discourse according to the scholar Gee.

time on task: 25 mins

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Drawing Your Conclusions

2. This first body paragraph talks about compassion fatigue and how it can affect a veterinarian and how it correlates with Gee’s “saying” building task.

3. My second body paragraph talks about the duties that veterinarians have to do within a single day on the job and how it belongs in the “doing” category of the building tasks.

4. The third body paragraph talks about how there is a combination of the building tasks “being” and “believing” which goes along with the identity roles in the Discourse of being a veterinarian and the basic schooling requirements for this Discourse.

5. My fourth body paragraph talks about the “values” within this Discourse which I named as the pros and cons of being a veterinarian.

6. My last body paragraph talks about how the negative sides of the Discourse can be a testing or deciding factor of whether people can continue practicing in the Discourse or not.

• Does my analysis of this particular Discourse have components that do not quite fit into a straightforward application of Gee’s ideas? What are they? (If so, perhaps you have something important to ADD to – or even CHALLENGE Gee’s sense of – the ways that Discourses work.)
  • I believe that my ideas fit into a straightforward application of Gee’s ideas, I just need to do some reorganizing of paragraphs and ideas to make those points more clear. For example I need to reorganize the part about compassion fatigue, and redo my paragraphs about identities.
• Are there reasons to consider the ways your Discourse works very similarly to other, perhaps related Discourses? Maybe your Discourse is a subset of a broader set of Discourses. (If so, perhaps your analysis may be able to tell us about this broader set of Discourses.)
  • I believe that my Discourse can connect to other medical professional Discourses such as general doctors, anesthesiologists, surgeons, and obstetricians. However, since a veterinarian has to be all of these at once, it is a broader Discourse.
• Our Discourse analyses are all limited by the source material from which we’ve drawn. Hopefully, you’ve chosen really good artifacts that help you reveal some key features of the Discourse. But there are probably some important LIMITATIONS that you can see. What are they? These are possibly areas for further inquiry should one pursue the project further.
  • The artifacts I’ve been using for this paper have given me general ideas of what a veterinarian does but does not go into detail or describe what those things actually mean. So, if I were to go into detail or describe a basic procedure, I would probably have to look at a new artifact.

Conclusion:

Being a veterinarian means you devote your time and energy to your patients, which are the animals that you help daily. Since this is a time consuming career, it is considered a lifestyle or your identity – which is why being a veterinarian is considered a Dominant Discourse………….

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1. Write 1-3 sentences that frame the larger context or issue to which your paper speaks.In my essay, I will discuss the different hockey artifacts. These artifacts evolve in what makes a hockey player a hockey player. Hockey players are different from every other athlete. This essay will help better understand that. 
2. Write 2-4 sentences that help establish your credibility by signaling whose texts you’ll engage and how you’ll engage those texts. If done effectively, it is quite possible to also weave in brief mention of the ideas you’ll engage to signal “what you’ll show” in the paper. I read three different articles discussing hockey. Theses three articles all consisted of artifacts that help the reader get a better understanding of the sport of hockey.  My artifacts  are relatable to Gee in many ways. They show how the difference in dominant and non dominance can affect ones career status.
3. 1-3 sentences that move from the “what you’ll show” as you engage specific texts to your view on the issue. Throughout this article I will show you how my artifacts are similar to Gee and how these artifacts are important when think about joining the sport of hockey.

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The first revision I made was on paragraph 4, where I talk about the identities within the Discourse of being a veterinarian. I changed my paragraph into 3 paragraphs. The first one talks about the identities within being a doctor of veterinary science, while the two following paragraphs talk about smaller identities within the Discourse, and how some doctors continue schooling to become zoo vets.

When becoming a veterinarian there is a combination of “Being” and “Believing”, you need one to reach the other (Believing gets you to Being).“Being” is described as an identity in the Discourse, which would be the title of a doctor of veterinary medicine. “Believing” is described as the knowledge that counts for said Discourse, which would be to obtain a bachelor’s degree with a heavy emphasis on science and math and to volunteer with animals to get hands-on experience. ValuePenguin identifies some identities as being an “Owner of a practice, anesthesiologist, surgeon, obstetrician”. A veterinarian has to be all of those things within a single day – different patients brings upon different procedures and duties. Although being the veterinarian is the master of this Discourse, there are smaller roles (identities) that belong in this Discourse as well.

The second revision I did was on paragraph 3, where I talk about the duties that veterinarians have. I shortened a block quote and added ellipses to make the paragraph shorter and not overwhelming with duties that vets are entitled to do.

Since vets may experience more death and even different species of animals, they may be “Doing” a plethora of duties within a single day. “Doing” is described by Gee as activities that are enacted within the Discourse. According to ValuePenguin, veterinarians are entitled to “Examine patients to assess general physical condition… analyze test or data images to inform diagnosis, treatment or cause of death, treat acute illnesses, infections or injuries… operate on patients to treat conditions… prescribe medication and develop medical treatment plans…”. Also, according to the “Occupational Outlook Handbook on Veterinarians” vets are also described as being entitled to: “Examine animals to diagnose their health problems, treat and dress wounds, perform surgery on animals, test for and vaccinate against diseases, operate medical equipment, such as x-ray machines, advise animal owners about general care, medical conditions and treatments, prescribe medication, and euthanize animals.” All of these descriptions are actions or practices that veterinarians went to school for so they could become the doctor they set out to be.

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The first article I read was “The Rules Of Ice Hockey” by realbuzz.com. In this article it discussed many artifacts. Some which include saying/writing, doing, being, valuing, believing and combinations. The  saying/writing included the author describing offsides and icing. These are two very important rules in ice hockey and is something everyone who plays hockey understands.  The doing part was when the author made a quote saying that “the object of the game is to score more goals than the other team.” This is the doing part because its basic goal in hockey and that is to win. The being part which means what identities are relevant. For this part I wrote thateach team can have a maximum of 2o players including two goalies.  The valuing part is what’s said to be most important to hockey players. For this I wrote that hockey is “one of the fastest flowing sports in the world.” This is what hockey players take pride in. For the believing part I wrote that the “referee (who wears the orange stripe) controls the game and makes the final decision.” The combinations part is that the blue lines and red lines combine to make different zones in the rink.  These are good examples of artifacts that I found in the article.

In this article I discuss the article “The Rules of Ice Hockey”. I go through each of the artifacts involved in this passage. This way the author can get a better understanding of hockey.  I could do a better job relating to Gee. I could do a better job describing the importance of each of these artifacts.

 

 

In the article Ice Hockey by Gerald Eskenazi, the saying/writing artifact is that hockey is a french word for coquet (shepherds stick). I thought this was pretty interesting and relevant to hockey. The doing part is that Wayne Gretzky dominated the NHL in the eightys.  The being part is that the Boston Bruins were the very first american team to join the NHL. This is relevant because they played a huge role in developing hockey in america. The valuing part is that in the late 1800’s hockey was competing with lacrosse as Canadas most popular sports. Hockey is something that canadiens value very much.  The believing part is that hockey is known to be Canadas game. Everyone believes that Canada is the best at hockey.  The combinations is that the NHL started with 6 teams and now has 30. This shows the development of all the teams.  These are just a few good artifacts that I found in this article. 

In this article I describe the article “Ice Hockey”. I list all of the artifacts. I should do a better job describing these and how they relate to Gee.  I could also do a better job relating them to the previous article.

Another article I read was Hockey Players Are The Toughest by Andrew Podnieks/IIHF. This article discussed how tough hockey players are. The saying/writing part was that Ice hockey is the most demanding team sport in the world. This is very true. The doing part is that strength in american football, is usually brute force, but in hockey that strength must be used to a creative end otherwise its useless. This discusses how challenging hockey is. The being part is that to face the snapshots of the pros these days, nerve is a 60 minute prerogative. This is an example of what it takes to play hockey. The valuing part is that they play a sport that is more physically demanding than any other- 60 minutes in a confined area with no comfort zone out of bounds- but they play with an ambition,love, and determination that is unparalleled. The believing part is what is known. For the believing part I wrote that goalies may not be quite as quick as a table tennis player, but replace the ping pong ball with a puck hurtling at 160 km/h at your face and the degree of difficulty is surely weighted toward the goalie.  The combinations part is two components that are combined. For this I put down the quote “ And lets face it, to asses the action on the ice while players are skating at upwards of 25km/h is a lot more challenging than the much slower paces of “ground sports” like American football or soccer, where players, without the aid of skates, move far slower than hockey players. This talks about the development of all the different skills it takes to play hockey.

In this paragraph  I discuss “Hockey Players Are The Toughest”. I answer each of the artifacts. I do a better job describing the artifacts in this paragraph. I still need to relate to Gee and the other articles. 

 

After reading these articles, I noticed that there are many things I didn’t know about hockey including the meaning of the word “hockey”. All of these articles describe the hockey discourse. What I mean by that is what it takes to be a hockey player. Some of these artifacts show some of the things that you come across while playing and taking part in hockey. My discourse can relate to Gees article in many ways. One of these ways includes  how Gee describes the Dominate and Non Dominant discourse. These artifacts include sayings, doings, believing and more. There are many discourses in this world. They involve many different actions. I have been playing hockey since I was two years old, so I know a little bit about hockey.  I know more than your average hockey player. There is still a lot to learn an gain from the sport of hockey.  Overall I think that the hockey discourse is something that can be interesting to anyone.

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For the following paragraph, I took out the definition for the seven building tasks. The reason I did this is to allow the intro not to be too heavy with detail and allow the read to pick up on the idea of the seven building tasks and gee’s discourse.

In society, people become involved in many different programs, activities, jobs and many other life styles. Gee says, these lifestyles are broken up into 4 categories: Dominant; non dominant; secondary;and primary discourse.  Primary discourses are learned from home and around your family. Secondary discourses are learned through social institutions (ie. school, church, work, etc.).  There are two types of Secondary Discourses: Dominant Discourses allow for the acquisition of social goods and status points, Non-Dominant Discourses do not. However, Non-Dominant Discourses do allow for an individual to become ‘solid’ with a given social network, there is just no increase in social status. According to Gee, discourses can be broken up into seven building tasks. These building tasks include, significance, practices, identities, relationships, social goods, connections, and knowledge . The idea behind these  building task’s is what makes you apart of whatever discourse you are in and shows you aren’t a mush-fake.

 

For the following paragraph, i added and took out information to make my claim more clear and easier to pick up on. Also I would like to find a better quote from gee to use in this paragraph as well to develop my ideas and connect them better

If you were to look at snowboarding you can pin it as a secondary and dominant discourse, or a secondary non-dominant discourse  depending how you approach snowboarding. “Secondary Discourses are learned through social institutions (ie. school, church, work, etc.). Dominant Discourses allow for the acquisition of social goods and status points” ( Gee 8).  Many events like: The X games; Burton Open; The Winter Olympics; or Dew tour are very popular and well known by everyone. The riders that compete in these competitions are considered professional snowboarders or rookies. They also make a living of snowboarding through competing and through sponsorship’s. For example: “rbes Magazine estimates that in 2008, snowboarding star Shaun White made $9 million in sponsorship earnings from Burton, Hewlett-Packard, Oakley, Red Bull and Target. Even top snowboarders rarely top $100,000 in annual prize money, so product promotions and sponsorship are the real source of income”(Duff 1). Also in my case, through age 9-15 i was sponsored and competed in smaller competitions for boarder-cross. When gee says that to be a dominant discourse you need to have a status point as well as social goods, Being a professional snowboarder allows you to have a status point as well as making money annually. On the flip side, snowboarding can also fall  in the category of secondary discourse. For example: “If you’re an experienced snowboarder, you can take advantage of the high-adrenaline cliff-jumping classes and expert-level chutes. Clinics and classes are designed for middle-of-the-road snowboarders who want to learn to turn with more precision, and if you’ve never snowboarded, you can choose private or group instruction with a certified instructor in a day class or multi-day clinic.”(Seaton 1) Every ski resort that you go to will have experts that hold lessons that range from beginner to expert. Also many mountains have there own ski/snowboard school that students join and  practice every day after school during the season.  There are several ways you can approach a different style of snowboarding, but in this case we will be looking at  all mountain riding, which would follow under secondary and non-dominant discourse.

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In my revisions my main goal was to clarify my ideas on the building task within the dentistry discourse. In both my paragraphs there was a lack of identifying what discourse dentistry was apart of, so within I made sure to mention clearly what discourse I was identifying.  I also started in the second paragraph that there could be a potential point of trying to wrap in the way that transferring between the discourse, but being still in the same dominant discourse. I started to make the move in the paragraph below, but I am still trying to gather some more data before I go through with this idea in my whole paragraph. This helped me a little bit more on my structuring for my paper. I think this movement of using Gees building task to show the resemblement between the two different practice in the same discourse. I also in both my paragraph tried to apply the formulas. I stated first my ideas I was displaying, then what Gees ideas was, lastly used my data to prove my point. I made sure to analyze my data clearly.

 

Throughout life someone will show a specific discourse they take part in by displaying a set of identities that relate to that discourse. Gee describes a identity, as something “we use [as] language to get recognized as taking on a certain identity or role, that is, to build an identity here and now” (33). It is a task, or way of speaking that shows they are fluent in a Discourse. A common identity of a dentist in a dominant secondary Discourse is someone who has a lot of knowledge, which can be shown by ,“a bachelor’s degree, a dental degree (DDS or DMD)… [and] also was required to get a masters in craniofacial biology”(Meru 1). As a dentist in a dominant secondary discourse they have to understand a variety of terms that will be used in everyday procedure. Not having all this information would not allow the dentist to be able to diagnose a patient properly can would not allow their to be prestige. This prestige can come from a patient, which can allow for a relationship between the doctor and patient with his proper doings of procedures.  

As a dentist in a dominant secondary discourse they use their specific identities to have successful practices throughout their work days. The idea of practice is “social recognized and institutionally or culturally supported endeavor[s] that usually involve sequencing or combining actions in certain ways” (Gee 17). The practices are ways of practicing what is learned, or expected for that specific Discourse. Although there are ways of transferring ideas into different parts of the Discourse, “as one can transfer a grammatical feature from one language to another”(Gee 9). As orthodontist the idea needed are similar, but things can be advanced to be able to practice different things. As an orthodontist their main goal is dealing with “a lot of adult interdisciplinary cases that I treat in conjunction with the dentist, periodontist, prosthodontist and surgeon”(Meru 1). As Gee would explain he is transferring his knowledge in that field to someone in that field that is more specialized in the specific issue. They work in a way that builds a connection in order to make sure each patient is properly taken care of.

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Printmaking is an extremely time consuming process. It takes carving mediums and a little bit of ink to create beautiful artistic editions. When you put all the focused time into it as it requires, you can become an expert quicker than you would expect. First you make a design you are interested in and transfer it on a medium or a plate. Next, you choose from many carving tools (depending upon what medium you are working on) to carve the plate. Lastly you roll out ink onto the medium of choice and use wet cotton paper to transfer your image through a printing press. You can quickly fall in love with this step by step process because of how beautiful your prints come out. Most printmakers take a lot of pride in their editions due to the fact of how much work goes into it.

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Printmaking is an extremely time consuming process. It takes carving into unique mediums and a little bit of ink, but it can create beautiful, artistic editions. A medium is any material you can carve into wether that be linoleum, plexiglass, or even a piece of wood. An edition is a collection of the same prints you have made with your carved medium. When you put all the focused time into printing as it requires, you can become an expert quicker than you would expect. First you make a design you are interested in and transfer it on a medium or otherwise known as a plate, with a sharpie marker. Next, you choose from many carving tools (depending upon what medium you are working on) to carve the plate. Lastly you roll out ink onto the medium of choice and use wet, cotton paper to transfer your image through a printing press. Anyone can easily fall in love with this step by step process because of how beautiful so many prints come out. Most printmakers take a lot of pride in their editions due to the fact of how much work goes into it.

For this paragraph I explained a lot more about what the different words mean that involve printmaking. I figured a lot of people wouldn’t exactly know what some of these words meant and it makes it easier for people to understand. I realized I used the word you a lot so I made it more general, figuring that most people will never try printing. One thing I am not sure about is if I should add anything to the last sentence. I can’t tell if it wraps up the paragraph or leaves my reader hanging.

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Being a printer is a hybrid secondary discourse. Although many artists produce print editions leisurely, there is always the potential of money, prestige, and status. My art teacher here at the University of New England has a print shop in Portland where she produces new editions every week. There, she sells her work. As an artist in Portland, I am sure she has some sort of status within the artist community there. Then of course, famous printmakers can acquire a lot of money and most definitely prestige from their work all over the world. Like me though, I do this for fun. You could say that I am in the non-dominant discourse of printing. Even though I do it for fun, there is always the potential for printers like myself to amount to the dominant discourse part of it. Even I, as an intermediate printmaker, could sell my prints and make money from them. In the Printing Discourse, most anyone can get money or acquire (at least some) prestige and status from it if you later become a master.

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Being a printer is a hybrid secondary discourse. Although many artists produce print editions leisurely, there is always the potential of money, prestige, and status. My art teacher here at the University of New England has a print shop in Portland where she produces new editions every week. There, she sells her work. As an artist in Portland, she definitely has a status within the artist community there. This puts her most likely in the lower part of the dominant discourse because she is not by any means famous. Famous printmakers can acquire a lot of money, and most definitely prestige from their work all over the world. Like me though, I do this for fun. You could say that I am in the non-dominant discourse of printing. Even though I do it for fun, there is always the potential for printers like myself to amount to the dominant discourse part of it. Even I, as an intermediate printmaker, could sell my prints and make money from them. This puts me in the non-dominant Discourse because my work does not bring with it money or prestige, but I am a part of a social network. I am a part of a social network of not only printers, but artists as well. In the Printing Discourse, most anyone can get money or acquire (at least some) prestige and status from it if you later work hard enough to become a master.

I changed some of my sentences so I sound more confident with my facts. Instead of saying “I’m sure she” I changed it to something like “she definitely has”. I also put an explanation in of what Discourse my art teacher was in because I seemed to be missing that. I also put more explanation of what secondary discourse I belonged too. I tried to use some more of Gee’s language here. I think something I could possibly add that adds to Gee’s theory is how there are different levels of money, status and prestige. Maybe in the paragraph when I explain Discourse I can do this.

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