What I’ve discovered about my draft through this process of revision is that I need to do more explaining on certain pieces of evidence that I provide. If I do more explaining and give examples, the paper itself may seem more like it actually was written by me and can’t be claimed by anybody else. I could use more creative language so the information is more interesting to my readers and doesn’t become boring. I also need to work on incorporating my own analysis of ideas into the paper so my paragraphs do not just consist of the evidence I found from the artifacts I’m using. As a way of making my paper more interesting, I could look harder into the artifacts I found to look for any new relevant information that would be interesting for my readers and maybe things I didn’t even know about the Discourse itself. I need to determine if any of the information I write about will lead to a dead end (or multiple dead ends) and make an awkward spot in my essay where there is no way to come back. To finalize my paper, I need to develop my conclusion so all of my information gets tied together. Lastly, I need to cite my sources as well.
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