After writing my first draft and getting feedback from my fellow classmates and teachers, I realized that I need to be more organized and do a better job relating my artifacts to Gee. I also noticed that I need to make it clear what the purpose of my essay is about. Right now its unorganized. I have good artifacts, I just need to do a better job describing them. After looking up manuscript revisions I realized that they are very detailed in corrections. I prefer the basic edits such as “describe more” or “move this to entertain the reader more”. Im not a fan of that type of revision. I think its too complicated and complex. I like keeping it simple. The more concise version is more clear for the reader. The longer one can get boring. Less is more when writing. I think a big part of me editing my essay is going to be organizing it and making it more clear for the reader. I think that overall I have good artifacts and I can turn it into a really good essay. I think I also need to do a better job relating my artifacts to Gee. Once I do these, I will have a really good essay.
“collreadwrit2e”
1 hour