- Artifacts. Do your peers find that you have good, meaty, juicy artifacts from your Discourse? Rich artifacts offer good pieces of language for analysis. If peers raised some questions about details on your Discourse, or about evidence, perhaps you need to locate a better artifact (or two). Describe your plan of action. My peers felt that I had artifacts with my essay. They did feel that I should describe my quotes more and relate them to Gee. With this being said, I am going to use better description and show why my quote is relatable to Gees passage.
- If you have the right kinds of artifacts, are you getting good “pieces of language” from them into your project? Peers should be helping you out by noting that the evidence to support your points about how your Discourse works is or isn’t quite there. Try to describe the kinds of language you need to work to add. This can help you as you revisit your sources to locate language to analyze. I need to relate my quote more to Gees Discoure. I need my reader to understand the purpose of my essay. Right now, theres not enough evidence.
- Remember: Even though you’ve now been writing about Discourse for awhile, your reader is not necessarily aware of the theories/concepts. Look at the ways you set up and introduce the project. What might you want/need to do to help a reader get on board with your project? This may mean that you want a paragraph to develop the idea of Discourse and of Discourse analysis. Such a paragraph might become the first body paragraph. I need a better introduction to capture the readers attention. I need to describe what a hockey discourse is.
- Consider how your peers responded to your “Note to Peers” blog post. What other substantive suggestions did your peers make? How do you imagine addressing the suggestions that strike you as important to engage? They thought I had good information. They did think I need to organize everything better. With that being said, I am going to start by making a better introduction on what a hockey discourse is. Than I will move intro three body paragraphs relating to Gee. I will finish with a conclusion that overviews everything.
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