To fix my final draft I definitely need to add reliable artifacts. That is the main problem I have with my essay as of currently. For other revisions, I definitely have to make my claim more prompted in my first paragraph. I focus entirely on Discourse. My analysis is how you can be considered a printmaker.
From my comments I need to:
- Describe how long it takes to print
- How I got into the printing discourse (being an art kid)
- What a medium is – pretty much what you are using to make the art work. Put that in after my firsty sentence talking about medium.
- Smoother transitions from one idea to the next
- Maybe a story how a print sold for money as my artifact? Ask art teachers.
- More explanation on how it is a hybrid
- The different ways you can tell some one is in a printing Discourse
- Make the names of the tools clear and tell how they are parts of the sign sysytem and knowledge element of Gee
- Figuring out what artifacts will be helpful to explain my paper better
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