Paragraph 1, draft 1:
Printmaking is an extremely time consuming process. It takes carving mediums and a little bit of ink to create beautiful artistic editions. When you put all the focused time into it as it requires, you can become an expert quicker than you would expect. First you make a design you are interested in and transfer it on a medium or a plate. Next, you choose from many carving tools (depending upon what medium you are working on) to carve the plate. Lastly you roll out ink onto the medium of choice and use wet cotton paper to transfer your image through a printing press. You can quickly fall in love with this step by step process because of how beautiful your prints come out. Most printmakers take a lot of pride in their editions due to the fact of how much work goes into it.
Paragraph 1, drat 2:
Printmaking is an extremely time consuming process. It takes carving into unique mediums and a little bit of ink, but it can create beautiful, artistic editions. A medium is any material you can carve into wether that be linoleum, plexiglass, or even a piece of wood. An edition is a collection of the same prints you have made with your carved medium. When you put all the focused time into printing as it requires, you can become an expert quicker than you would expect. First you make a design you are interested in and transfer it on a medium or otherwise known as a plate, with a sharpie marker. Next, you choose from many carving tools (depending upon what medium you are working on) to carve the plate. Lastly you roll out ink onto the medium of choice and use wet, cotton paper to transfer your image through a printing press. Anyone can easily fall in love with this step by step process because of how beautiful so many prints come out. Most printmakers take a lot of pride in their editions due to the fact of how much work goes into it.
For this paragraph I explained a lot more about what the different words mean that involve printmaking. I figured a lot of people wouldn’t exactly know what some of these words meant and it makes it easier for people to understand. I realized I used the word you a lot so I made it more general, figuring that most people will never try printing. One thing I am not sure about is if I should add anything to the last sentence. I can’t tell if it wraps up the paragraph or leaves my reader hanging.
Paragraph 2, draft 1:
Being a printer is a hybrid secondary discourse. Although many artists produce print editions leisurely, there is always the potential of money, prestige, and status. My art teacher here at the University of New England has a print shop in Portland where she produces new editions every week. There, she sells her work. As an artist in Portland, I am sure she has some sort of status within the artist community there. Then of course, famous printmakers can acquire a lot of money and most definitely prestige from their work all over the world. Like me though, I do this for fun. You could say that I am in the non-dominant discourse of printing. Even though I do it for fun, there is always the potential for printers like myself to amount to the dominant discourse part of it. Even I, as an intermediate printmaker, could sell my prints and make money from them. In the Printing Discourse, most anyone can get money or acquire (at least some) prestige and status from it if you later become a master.
Paragraph 2, draft 2:
Being a printer is a hybrid secondary discourse. Although many artists produce print editions leisurely, there is always the potential of money, prestige, and status. My art teacher here at the University of New England has a print shop in Portland where she produces new editions every week. There, she sells her work. As an artist in Portland, she definitely has a status within the artist community there. This puts her most likely in the lower part of the dominant discourse because she is not by any means famous. Famous printmakers can acquire a lot of money, and most definitely prestige from their work all over the world. Like me though, I do this for fun. You could say that I am in the non-dominant discourse of printing. Even though I do it for fun, there is always the potential for printers like myself to amount to the dominant discourse part of it. Even I, as an intermediate printmaker, could sell my prints and make money from them. This puts me in the non-dominant Discourse because my work does not bring with it money or prestige, but I am a part of a social network. I am a part of a social network of not only printers, but artists as well. In the Printing Discourse, most anyone can get money or acquire (at least some) prestige and status from it if you later work hard enough to become a master.
I changed some of my sentences so I sound more confident with my facts. Instead of saying “I’m sure she” I changed it to something like “she definitely has”. I also put an explanation in of what Discourse my art teacher was in because I seemed to be missing that. I also put more explanation of what secondary discourse I belonged too. I tried to use some more of Gee’s language here. I think something I could possibly add that adds to Gee’s theory is how there are different levels of money, status and prestige. Maybe in the paragraph when I explain Discourse I can do this.
Time on task: 1 hour
collreadwrit2e