The first paragraph I thought I could do a better job introducing what my discourse and what I am going to talk about. Right now I just discussed what a discourse is. I should discuss hockey and relate it to Gees.
The next paragraph I want to revise is the second paragraph. Here I should make it clear what a dominant and non dominant discourse is with hockey. Once I do this the reader will be more engaged and enjoy reading the rest of my article.
You know what they say, hockey is a sport of its own. Hockey players tend to be a lot different than your average athlete. “Discourse are “saying” (writing)-doing-being-valuing-believing combinations.” (Gee 6) There are many discourse in this world. These discourses tend to separate people into certain groups relating to that discourse. These discourses are all different and involve people with all different interest. Some discourses involve around sports, some involve around animals and the environment. These are just a few examples of what discourse can be. An example I like to use when describing discourse is looking in a school cafeteria, and seeing all the different types of groups, or should I say discourses. You’ll see all the athletes sitting together, all the academic genius and all other groups separated at different tables. It’s not that they forced to sit with these groups, it’s just they choose to because they are apart of that certain discourse. My discourse falls into that category. I play hockey, so I tend to hangout with athletes because we share a common discourse. We have the same interest in hockey. Almost everyone on the hockey team has been playing hockey for almost ten years. As you continue playing hockey, you develop certain traits that only hockey players would understand. Some of these traits include certain vocabulary, certain clothing and how you act in general. What I mean by vocabulary is terms like sauce, top cheese, bardown and plenty more. If you don’t play hockey, chances are you don’t have a clue what they mean. These are terms you catch on to when playing hockey. With the clothing part, it’s a lot of brands like bauer, lululemon and team merchandise. These are brands that are usually only found on hockey players. Hockey players act different than most athletes. We tend to be different in our own way.
Hockey can be a dominant and non dominate sport. It all depends on the level you participate in. I would be considered a non dominate discourse because I don’t get paid to play. However professional hockey player that make enough money to make a living are in the discourse. With hockey everyone starts out in the dominant discourse. You have to train and practice a lot to make it too the dominant discourse. There are many professional leagues that provide decent money including the NHL,AHL, and Europe leagues. The NHL being the highest paid league. The first article I read was “The Rules Of Ice Hockey” by realbuzz.com. In this article it discussed many artifacts. Some which include saying/writing, doing, being, valuing, believing and combinations. The saying/writing included the author describing offsides and icing. These are two very important rules in ice hockey and is something everyone who plays hockey understands. The doing part was when the author made a quote saying that “the object of the game is to score more goals than the other team.” This is the doing part because its basic goal in hockey and that is to win. The being part which means what identities are relevant. For this part I wrote that each team can have a maximum of 2o players including two goalies. The valuing part is what’s said to be most important to hockey players. For this I wrote that hockey is “one of the fastest flowing sports in the world.” This is what hockey players take pride in. For the believing part I wrote that the “referee (who wears the orange stripe) controls the game and makes the final decision.” The combinations part is that the blue lines and red lines combine to make different zones in the rink. These are good examples of artifacts that I found in the article.
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